(Insert name of poem here, I can't think of one)

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  1. AlexElm

    AlexElm Well-Known Member

    Life seemed too hard,
    too hard to hold on

    Until I came upon,
    You at the edge of dawn.

    I saw you walk by and I stopped and stared
    At moonlit strands of midnight hair.
    Falling around you, keeping me ensnared.

    One day later, I ask you out,
    Two months later, we nearly phased-out
    3 years later, I had no doubt.

    I find myself beside you 10 years on,
    pondering on the journey we have forgone
    And the time I met you at the edge of dawn.

    So ten years on, with you by my side
    I find myself still impressed with your eyes.
    Your hair, your face and your beautiful smile.
    I still love you with all my heart,
    Je’t aime my dear sweetheart.


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    Cheesy right? Don't bash on me too hard about this, it's my first (relatively) long poem. Every comment counts =D
     
  2. the_only_one

    the_only_one Well-Known Member

    wow. that was great. i wish icould steal it and put it ona valentines day card for my girlfriend:) maybe morning sun, ormy light. keep writing!
     
  3. AlexElm

    AlexElm Well-Known Member

    If you really think it's THAT good, go ahead =D. Thanks for commenting!
     
  4. the_only_one

    the_only_one Well-Known Member

    it really was:) and i might steal it. id feel bad tho:( ill keep thinking of a name and comment.
     
  5. Gemballs

    Gemballs Well-Known Member

    what about...

    sei l'amore della mia vita

    its you are the love of my life in itallian :)
    orr
    Tu es l'amour de ma vie
    (same again in french) x beauitful poem! x
     
  6. AlexElm

    AlexElm Well-Known Member

    "Tu es l'amour de ma vie" sounds the best because french sounds better (My opinion of course). So I like French. Shoot me.

    Thanks for commenting, cause I get paid in comments (Raises your self-esteem pretty high =D )
     
  7. Cute_Angel_Xx

    Cute_Angel_Xx Account Closed

    Thats a awesome poem, so sweet. I love it :wub:
     
  8. AlexElm

    AlexElm Well-Known Member

    Just a quicky, did you know what "Phased-Out" meant? It was a made up word from "phase-out" and probably used out of context.
     
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