[Insert name of poem here]

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  1. AlexElm

    AlexElm Well-Known Member

    Sometimes I wish for another end,
    To that sad, sad story that I will spend
    Twenty-four hours, being around the bend.
    Telling you of a story I want to pretend,
    That never happened, a memory I need to mend.

    It was 5 in the morning and my parents were asleep.
    I got out of bed, to make sure I don’t oversleep.
    I slip out the door, making the floorboards creek

    I ran around the building, around and around
    What make I saw next, nearly made me break down

    A woman in the alley was being attacked.
    The men attacked in a pack.
    And blood flew with each impact.

    I think she looked at me, begging me to help.
    But I stared and stared while she yelped.
    And I ran away, my knees as weak as kelp.

    I rushed through the door, my parents were still asleep.
    I walked into my room and broke down in a heap.

    So at the tender age of nine, I witnessed a beating
    That shaped my life, that made happiness fleeting.

    So from that day on, I wanted to make amends,
    To the woman that begged for my help with that one, small look.
    And four years on I can still see the crooks.

    Fours years on and I can still remember her eyes.
    Four years on and I can remember her cries.

    I've never told this to anyone, not even to the forum (Ye, I know it's bad for me). A lot of effort went into conveying my pain. So how did I do?

    PS. PLEASE Comment.
  2. The Unforgiven

    The Unforgiven Well-Known Member

    its so poignant hun.. im sorry you had to see that, im sorry you had to see this :hug: :hug:
  3. Ouroboros

    Ouroboros Chat Buddy

    Hey there,

    I glad you have found a way to speak about it. You should not blame yourself, you were just nine, what were you to do? but we all seem to blame ourselves for things and if you need to make amends then perhaps you can find a way.
    I think you did really well writing this out, you should keep doing it :smile: It's hard to express urself alot of the time but i think you did it well particularly with such a traumatic thing.

  4. AlexElm

    AlexElm Well-Known Member

    These days, sometimes I run a series of "what ifs" in my head. What if I had gotten help? What if when I got back, I called the police?

    Also, this was not the only thing I saw on my runs. If I run far enough I actually saw some pretty damn ugly stuff. I stopped having my daily runs when I was 10 because I saw too much and now that I think about it, I don't know how I survived a year of seeing this stuff. I'm going to write more about the things I saw because it makes me feel a bit better.
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  5. Ouroboros

    Ouroboros Chat Buddy


    I'm glad you are going to keep writing.. I'll keep reading :hug:
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