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Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by thesemomentsastheypass, Oct 3, 2007.

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  1. thesemomentsastheypass

    thesemomentsastheypass Well-Known Member

    I bled again
    when you said again
    that sharp goodbye
    when you unpicked a dream
    that so easily
    could have been

    A crimson dust in my throat
    of dried iron linked to some
    stress condition or fragments
    of a heart internally combusted

    Hoarse, therefore, of course
    but then what could I have said?
    Even in soliloquies,
    the words perfected,
    the order, my love
    you would have corrected.
     
  2. ~PinkElephants~

    ~PinkElephants~ Senior member

    I like this alot hun. My favorite verse is the first one. :hug:
     
  3. thesemomentsastheypass

    thesemomentsastheypass Well-Known Member

    Thank you

    Justone of those that fell out. Needs refinement, but I rarely bother prior to posting here (as a quick search will reveal).

    Peace.
     
  4. theleastofthese

    theleastofthese SF Friend Staff Alumni

    Quite lovely it is! Glad to see you back:smile:
     
  5. ~CazzaAngel~

    ~CazzaAngel~ Staff Alumni

    So wonderful. I can really identify with this. Thank you for sharing this with us! :hug: :hug: :)
     
  6. thesemomentsastheypass

    thesemomentsastheypass Well-Known Member

    thank you all. Humbling.

    Hi Least.

    how's tricks and things?
     
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