Inside Of Me

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by Morningstar, Jan 15, 2012.

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  1. Morningstar

    Morningstar Well-Known Member

    Darkness swirling
    Darkness folding
    In on me

    Light retreating
    Light reciding
    Away from me

    Hate engulfing
    Hate enfolding
    All of me

    Love escaping
    Love dying
    Inside of me

    A poem I wrote back in May of 2010 when going through a bout of insomnia. To be honest I'd almost forgotten it even existed, any comments, and feedback(as long as it isn't too negative) are welcome.
  2. insanityx

    insanityx Member

    I really enjoyed was short simple..but very deep. Great job :)
  3. Tmacster1

    Tmacster1 Well-Known Member

    Great job on the poem :goodone:

    It's deep and has great thought behind it. Short and simple are typically the kind of poems I like. Even though long poems can get the message a cross. Keep writing poems though. :)

  4. Morningstar

    Morningstar Well-Known Member

    My thanks to both of you, your comments are very appreciated. I like this one quite a bit myself although in general my poems tend to be a bit longer. Again thanks to both of you and I definitely won't stop writing any time soon, well at least as long as I'm breathing anyway.
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