Invitation to the Dance

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  1. Acy

    Acy Mama Bear - TLC, Common Sense Staff Member Safety & Support

    Invitation to the Dance

    My eyes are closed
    the doors shut tight
    the windows sealed
    I cannot fight
    I can't be healed
    I've been invited to
    Death's slow dance

    Guardian angels
    have poached my hope
    removed it from
    within my scope
    and with that lye
    the angels make
    a scouring, soulless soap

    My life laid bare
    I cannot win, I do not care
    there is no reason
    there is no chance
    but to accept
    Death's invitation
    to Death's slow dance
  2. innocencexisxlove

    innocencexisxlove Well-Known Member

    this is really beautiful Acy... truely is.

    I like it very much.
  3. theleastofthese

    theleastofthese SF Friend Staff Alumni

    Very good, I like it.:smile:
  4. Wow, Acy...!!

    Besides that this is indeed so very beautifully written, it doesn't seem to me to be all about 'sadness' per se - but a bittersweetness (I happened to have been fond of 'bittersweetness' for as long back as I can remember). Considering that indeed we all move closer to the moment of death with each breath we take and exhale - there is still within that knowing, a singularly unique brand of peace in acknowledging it. At least...that's what came through to me in your words...

    And I do hope and wish (and not with futility) that we all here could find such moments - no matter before, or when our time comes...

  5. thedeafmusician

    thedeafmusician Staff Alumni

    I love this... the way it reads so well and flows along almost seamlessly, the images it places in your mind... this is brilliant.

  6. ACRon

    ACRon Well-Known Member

    "and we shall sweep the streets we used to own"

    loved it :hug:
  7. Lucie

    Lucie Well-Known Member

  8. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Member Safety & Support SF Supporter

    awesome poem hun! thank you for sharing :arms:
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