It's Just Me Being Stupid (poem... feedback?)

Discussion in 'Positive Feelings and Motivational Messages' started by scarlettdrknss, Mar 13, 2012.

  1. scarlettdrknss

    scarlettdrknss Well-Known Member

    When will you stop drawing gallows
    At the base of your holy neck
    When will you wake to see a new day rise
    Instead of just watching the sun set

    I know you're an angel with wings torn
    You have been since you were born
    But you're not the devil on his way back home
    All you are is just completely alone
    Stop making the razors red
    Close your eyes when you go to bed
    Dream a little dream of a future
    Where the world isn't made of torture

    When will you stop drawing gallows
    At the base of your holy neck
    When will you wake to see a new day rise
    Instead of just watching the sun set

    I know you don't even want to care
    But if you try you could reach fresh air
    Your soul's the size of the universe
    Believe me, the people round you are the curse
    Talking with something so splittering sharp
    While your voice floats gently with the harp
    Gentle skin roughened using glass
    Why don't you just stop smoking that grass

    When will you stop drawing gallows
    At the base of your holy neck
    When will you wake to see a new day rise
    Instead of just watching the sun set

    I know this is your intention
    But this is also something i have to mention
    I can't just watch with knowing eyes
    While you continue spitting lies
    I'd be a bigger demon than I already am
    And now I'm just a selfish lamb
    Telling you what to do
    Because I think you can make it through

    When will you stop drawing gallows
    At the base of your holy neck
    When will you wake to see a new day rise
    Instead of just watching the sun set

    I know... I know why the streets are gray
    But everyone tries to find their very own way
    Did you know that sometimes
    I can't find a word that rhymes
    So I watch an eagle climb and fall
    Watch as he loses his freedom, his all
    But the glass that covers the screen
    Stops me from wiping his wounds clean
    And like the others I just turn away
    And I know I'm still a destroyer today

    When will you stop drawing gallows
    At the base of your holy neck
    When will you wake to see a new day rise
    Instead of just watching the sun set

    I have to admit this secret that, no
    That actually I don't know
    The right way to live this life
    The right way to fight the strife
    I actually know nothing at all, understand?
    I can't even help a friend stand
    All i can do is dream and find
    A world for myself hidden in my mind.

    __

    a poem for everyone, because everyone has days when they feel down. read between the lines and you might find more than even on first glance.
    since this is for everyone, reposting is allowed just add Scarlett Darkness or SD =]
    thx for reading!
     
  2. total eclipse

    total eclipse SF Friend Staff Alumni

    So excellent hun thanks for sharing it
     
  3. scarlettdrknss

    scarlettdrknss Well-Known Member

    thank you! x3
    oh and also: it was inspired by Gallows by Atreyu ^^
     
  4. Witty_Sarcasm

    Witty_Sarcasm Writer, Musician, Fun Lover, Magic Maker

    You have a lot of talent...thanks for sharing this :smile:
     
  5. scarlettdrknss

    scarlettdrknss Well-Known Member

    thank you x]