Just something I want to say

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by annak, May 25, 2008.

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  1. annak

    annak Member

    Hello. I know this is bad, tacky, stupid, mediocre... but I just want to express myself. Sorry:

    I need to be kissed, I think
    Because I have locked myself up
    In this glass box
    From such a long time
    That it makes people
    Look close
    When they are really far off.

    I need to be kissed, I think
    Because I haven't been kissed in a long time.
    Although I have been kissed many times before,
    Those kisses didn't mean anything,
    So they don't count.

    I need to be kissed
    To feel that my life is,
    I don't know,
    Something with meaning,
    Something that someone cares about.
    Although I know many people care about me,
    I don't feel it. Or I don't care.

    That's why I need to be kissed, I think,
    Or perhaps I really don't.
    Perhaps what I really need is to understand
    why I feel so empty.

    I think that I need to play with your hands,
    Hang from your arms,
    Rest my head on your chest,
    And laugh without stopping
    about nothing.

    And you could be anyone,
    but at the same time, not just anyone.
    You should be able to laugh without stopping with me
    about the same things I laugh.
    You should be my friend.
    And you should want to kiss me.
    And kiss me.

    But the problem is me, I know.
    I think I want you to kiss me, but
    Probably the moment after you do,
    I will want to disappear
    And to see you no more.

    Because such closeness
    For such a long time
    makes me shiver.

    And that's why I'm in this glass box
    That is made of dark glass,
    Comfortable, but terrorific.

    (But at the same time
    I think that kisses are only incidental,
    That your kiss will end up not counting like the ones before.
    Because there is something else that is wrong)

    Corrections are welcome. Any. English is not my first language. Perhaps later I will post my original thoughts in Spanish.
     
  2. Lead Savior

    Lead Savior Well-Known Member

    It isn't bad, tacky, mediocre, and most importantly it isn't stupid. It can't be any of those things, because it is yours.

    I thought it was good.

    Your writing is a unique expression first, something to be criticized a very distant second.
     
  3. annak

    annak Member

    Well, thank you! Especially for reading it!

    It was just something I wanted to say. And something I wanted someone to read, to know about. Something that I wrote, desperatly, without thinking too much, last night before going to sleep. I wish I had talent for writing.

    (and if someone wants to correct my English, that would be so welcome!)
     
  4. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Alumni SF Supporter

    nice poem:smile:
     
  5. touglytobeloved

    touglytobeloved Well-Known Member

    I want to be kissed, too. I have never been kissed in a way like im someone special.
     
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