Last Time, Really

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by amicrazy, Jul 7, 2008.

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  1. amicrazy

    amicrazy Well-Known Member

    Last Time, Really a sonnet in iambic pentameter

    Free falling head first deep into a hole
    Living a life of low to no control.
    Every time I would pause, to take a breath,
    Could feel myself slowly approaching death.
    Breathing in and out without real purpose
    Trying to escape a life that’s perfect
    The moment you start will change your self worth,
    Find yourself regretting your day of birth.
    If and when you decide to call it quits,
    When you stop freaking out and throwing fits
    When you can look at yourself without hate
    When you decide to control your own fate
    When you remember what you’ve been and cringe
    Have power to resist one final binge.
  2. gentlelady

    gentlelady Staff Alumni

    I really like this. thank you for sharing with us.
  3. thedeafmusician

    thedeafmusician Staff Alumni

    My respect goes to you! Iambic penameter drives me up the wall... I'm just not made for writing tightly structured poetry, haha. Thanks for sharing this. =)

  4. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Member Safety & Support SF Supporter

    I like it, thanks for sharing :arms:
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