Let It

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by NotSureAnymore, Nov 12, 2009.

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  1. NotSureAnymore

    NotSureAnymore Well-Known Member

    Clear my mind
    And let me find
    This inner peace
    That wants to be released

    The light is so dim
    The darkness is grim
    I cannot make out
    What's left from doubt

    As clear as a rain cloud
    My heart makes a sound
    It echoes like a pin drop
    And the pain doesn't stop

    A soundless scream
    Rings through clear
    Echoing through my head
    Enough to wake the dead
    I wish I could dream
    I'll keep my eyes closed as I disappear

    Dreamless with chances of rain
    Hopelessness wishing for pain
    Emptiness with no chance of hell
    Self loathing drowning in an empty well

    *This one was typed up today.. but I wasn't sad, I just felt inspired. Well.. I was at Wally world waiting for the techs to change the oil in my car. I got really annoyed having to wait so long.. I had to go sit by myself and just wait.. while people walked by me and stared at me and what was in my cart, lol. Aholes :)*
  2. Tobes

    Tobes Well-Known Member

    I like it, because it has substance. Its not just doom and gloom, like a lot of the poetry I have read on this forum. Almost anyone can write a poem about how much pain they are in and how they want to die or cut themselves, but to get a message across, that takes talent. If you write more like this, then you're on to a winner.
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  3. total eclipse

    total eclipse SF Friend Staff Alumni

    great write thanks
  4. Scully

    Scully Well-Known Member

    Exact match. Please write more.
  5. bubblin girl

    bubblin girl Well-Known Member

    I love it...you are so talent...keep it up :)
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