Life Lost

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  1. Dragon

    Dragon Staff Alumni

    Too much, he says,
    Too much for one alone.
    Religion was the first stop.

    Stop.

    Stop those little voices.
    Room for one more?
    No!
    No room at the inn.

    Talk.
    He wouldn't talk.
    Looked for refuge for weeks
    in the bottom of a bottle.

    That green tint isn't envy.
    Waste of space.

    Wouldn't admit any problem.
    No problem. No
    More than that,
    you're fired,
    fucking useless.

    Never
    Say he didn't try.

    Lying on grass by the road.
    Life's a hard thing to lose.
     
  2. Joshuwah

    Joshuwah Well-Known Member

    ^,^

    I liked it

    ^,^
     
  3. theleastofthese

    theleastofthese SF Friend Staff Alumni

    I too liked it. Cryptic but descriptive nonetheless. I like your poetry.
     
  4. Joshuwah

    Joshuwah Well-Known Member

    Her stories are better :tongue: :smile: :biggrin:
     
  5. Dragon

    Dragon Staff Alumni

    Thanks Josh, Least :smile:

    Also, Josh, I'll take that as a compliment :tongue:
     
  6. Acy

    Acy Mama Bear - TLC, Common Sense Staff Member Safety & Support

    Very emotionally evocative...I like it a lot!
     
  7. Dragon

    Dragon Staff Alumni

    Thanks Acy! ^_^
     
  8. Dreamer uk

    Dreamer uk Well-Known Member

    I thought it was excellent, very good writing style and I liked the ending.
     
  9. Dragon

    Dragon Staff Alumni

    Thanks Mark :smile:
     
  10. danni

    danni Chat Buddy

    very well written hun :hug:
     
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