Lonely dream

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by Scars and Memories, Mar 28, 2009.

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  1. Scars and Memories

    Scars and Memories Account Closed

    A silent night
    The moon and stars
    are shining bright
    And I'm sleeping restless,
    reaching out for you in my dreams
    Do you dream about me too,
    can you hear my screams?
    If I hadn't met you I wouldn't still be here,
    but you're far away from me and I want you near
    I wonder if I died would you ever know
    Would you start to cry even though you don't love me no mo?
    I'd kill myself if that would make you understand
    Sadly, sometimes fairy tales don't have a happy end
     
  2. justafool

    justafool Well-Known Member

    Using "no mo" for a rhyme was certainly a cheeky thing to do. I would have liked to have seen such cheekiness used throughout. :cool:
     
  3. Scars and Memories

    Scars and Memories Account Closed

    xD I wanted the poem to be serious, but it had to rhyme! Thanks for the advice, I will be cheeky:laugh:
     
  4. justafool

    justafool Well-Known Member

    Yes! Please unleash your inner cheekiness. I'd love to see it spew forth unrestrained. :tongue:
     
  5. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Alumni SF Supporter

    :hug:
     
  6. canis-lupis

    canis-lupis Well-Known Member

    Stay out of my head !

    damn thats deep & just so fits.

    keep it up
     
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