Midnight Waltz (From Gr.11)

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  1. PandorasToybox

    PandorasToybox Well-Known Member

    Midnight Waltz


    Your curtain is open, your stage is lit
    The hall is quiet- where’s your audience?
    There’s no time to stand and wait
    A story of a midnight waltz awaits

    The music starts and you take her hands
    Step in step you begin the dance
    Of my hatred and regret

    The night is long, my story can’t end
    In the darkness- at the back
    I hum along and watch
    This midnight waltz should have never been
    Something for you to defend

    Our love is strong, it can’t end
    I sit and I’m silent
    Time will pass, the end will come
    But love is forever strong

    The music plays on and on
    Step in step; I’ve never seen smiles shine on
    Peaceful as the night, you move along
    Forgetting the loving-hate I did create
    Not knowing I’ m sitting here tonight

    The night is long, my story can’t end
    Until I watch this peaceful waltz
    See those smiles shine on
    Music going on and on

    Like a dream you fade away
    Into the light of your stage
    Voices laughing- hands clapping
    Where’s your audience?

    Tears do fall all night long
    In the back- in the dark
    In front your light- in front your stage
    I miss the music and your shine

    Where’s the audience?
    Your curtain is open, your stage is lit
    Where’s the music?
    She’s standing- waiting to dance

    This midnight waltz should have never been
    Something for you to defend
    All I ever wanted
    Was to be dancing with you

    The night is long- so is this dream
    Of regret and shame
    Walking off your stage shouldn’t be
    Keep dancing on and on
    Till the night is gone

    In the back- I’ll sit and wait
    This dream goes on
    Till the story ends
    And the curtains close
     
  2. kurenai

    kurenai Well-Known Member

    It's so sad and hypnotic, its rhythm is definitely a dance on its own. Have you tried setting the poem to the tune of a waltz? That would be really interesting.
     
  3. ashes_away

    ashes_away Well-Known Member

    oo i like this one.great atmosphere...very melodramatic and tragic!
    I agree about the waltz music.could be interesting.but that might be overkill....its not really needed..the reader can hear and feel the music in their minds.
     
  4. PandorasToybox

    PandorasToybox Well-Known Member

    There's a funny story behind the poem that I think gave it it's feeling. But I love it as well, tres dramatic. One day I want to write a play around this atmosphere
     
  5. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Alumni SF Supporter

    I love it :D
     
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