My Black Rose Moon

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  1. The Unforgiven

    The Unforgiven Well-Known Member

    My black rose moon*

    Forsaken and forgotten, Rose,
    Thou hadst withered on thy stem,*
    Shedding petals like tears, so dark,*
    Crushed, crumpled, and fragrant yet.

    The glory lost, the once proud bloom bowed,
    No more shall the blossom flare,
    No more the dewdrops touch thy lips,
    No more shall the admirers care,

    No more will thy soft folds blush,
    Never again, the beauty unfold,
    Never the sweet furled edges smile,
    Never like in the days of old..

    For all the pride, the scent thrown wide,
    Never a pitied gaze you'll lack,
    The shrivelled stalk is all remained,
    with thy thorns, thy core curled black.*

    Desolate and despaired is my rose,
    Joined is she in me, too late, too soon..
    Haunting my world with her touch..
    My black night sky, my black rose moon..

  2. total eclipse

    total eclipse SF Friend Staff Alumni

    How well you use your words the description done so well of a rose fading
    great write hugs
  3. may71

    may71 Well-Known Member

    wow! this is great! did you really write this?

    are you a professional poet?
  4. The Unforgiven

    The Unforgiven Well-Known Member

    Yeah I wrote this.. I've just lost a baby, so I'm pretty messed up again...
    Not a professional poet, tho I would love to be published.. Maybe some day I'll have a book out, I have enough for two by now lol.
    Glad you liked it, thanks. :hug:
  5. may71

    may71 Well-Known Member

    do you want to talk about what happened?

    I'm sorry that you lost your baby
  6. lissa08

    lissa08 Member

    This is amazing and beautiful, and tragic. Well done. <3
  7. The Unforgiven

    The Unforgiven Well-Known Member

    i have no words except abstractions, i have no feeling except emptiness.. poetry is my crutch and my hobble, and yet i laugh at myself, lol.
  8. BenJ

    BenJ Active Member

    This inspires me to write,
    I always wish I could,
    I'm literally speechless
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