My first post.

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by LonelyHero, Aug 28, 2006.

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  1. LonelyHero

    LonelyHero New Member

    Yeah, I'm new here. Saw the poet's corner and figured it'd be a good place to get some feedback on my stuff.

    Some info about this:
    I don't sit down and think out the poem before I write, I just basically freestyle my way through it, writing how I feel and just rhyming as I go. Hope you all like!

    I call this one "Again and again"

    Again and again is circles round and round
    I feel loneliest when I'm in the midst of a crowd
    Please help me out, I need this thought to flee
    I need my own mind back, I need to think free
    I'm sick of my mind being pulled this way and that
    I'll do anything to stop it, bash it in with a bat
    ANYTHING TO STOP, that's all I pled
    I claw at the temples till they finally bleed
    Still the thought echos, oh when will it leave
    Someone please help! Find a way to relieve
    But alas there is nothing. No one can stop it
    Sadly, I must deal with this pain, I finally admit.
  2. curtius

    curtius Well-Known Member

    its the greatest release to be able to let your words speak for you...


  3. LonelyHero

    LonelyHero New Member

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