My mental monolith

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by theleastofthese, Sep 10, 2006.

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  1. theleastofthese

    theleastofthese SF Friend Staff Alumni

    I desperately want to put a poem
    in The Corner
    but that granite chunk is back:
    taking up all the space
    on the desk in my head
    and the words won't come -
    can't get past the rage
    and frustration and
    self deprecation,
    and the realization that
    this is no more than an ugly
    comma-littered
    run-on sentence
    that's running out of
    sense.


    least

    yuck, I'm making myself sick:mad:
     
  2. Actually dear...

    That was an awesome expression! Flowed well, and one can't help feel your frustration! You just made lemonade!! It was perfect! Keep on describing that chunk of rock and you take away its power, chiselling away at it...

    {{FAL1}}
     
  3. LtRoarke

    LtRoarke Guest

    Hey least! That was really good! I read a lot of poems in my Literature classes about writer's block. It made me smile, which I needed this morning :)
     
  4. theleastofthese

    theleastofthese SF Friend Staff Alumni

    Thanks to you both!!:smile: :smile: I like it better a couple days later, but I've never felt comfortable with 'free verse'. I do better in rhyme, but sometimes I feel free.

    love ya muchly,

    least

    I just happen to like lemonade!:wink: Good way to put it! Danke schoen!

    xoxoxox
     
  5. Your "free verse" is as descriptive and effective as anything that rhymes! It was 'pure'. Less contrived (and you did manage some rhymes in there nevertheless, which added to the whole...)

    And as you've been known to say, it reads well aloud - it's a phrase of expression - not a sentence! I still love it...

    {{FAL1}}
     
    Last edited: Sep 11, 2006
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