My Mind Is Slant

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by confuzzle, Jul 13, 2009.

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  1. confuzzle

    confuzzle Well-Known Member

    My mind is slant
    I think it's time for a little rant
    It all started when i started writing
    these poems, they come all out of my mind
    but they seem to be off, each in its own kind
    I try to rhyme fool with full
    that doesn't work, lets add bull
    shit, then my poem goes on a tangent
    damn it, lets have at it
    does it even matter if i rhyme?
    i guess each of my poems matter, in some bit
    each in their own precious time
    It always gets to me
    how my mind seems so carefree
    but when i get to poetry
    everything seems off a bit, the lines, the rhythm
    does that mean I'm broken?
    people say that my poetry is good
    but i don't know
    it feels disjointed, playing to a song without a melody
    o crap now, I haven't been rhyming
    such an easy little rule
    more easily broken, especially when all i see
    is the lack of symmetry
    in my mind
    in the world
    it really never works out just right
    gives me a bit of a fright, just want my night light
    go back to the days
    when the rays
    of sunlight would shine their warmth, bright, bright, bright
    and then my mind would be alright.
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  2. EricS

    EricS Member

    I like the poem, confuzzle - thank you for posting it :) Sometimes I find myself thinking the same.
  3. pit

    pit Well-Known Member

    This has flow and poetic retrospection. Like it lots!:goodjob:
  4. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Member Safety & Support SF Supporter

    Great poem hun,thanks for sharing :heart:
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