My poem - 10 words

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by bubblebear, Jul 13, 2016.

  1. bubblebear

    bubblebear Princess

    Syzygy


    Music to your muscles,
    just something to do.
    Expect nothing
    except the dreamer in you.
    Ironic it is,
    but nothing falls short -
    of something spectacular.

    Oh sorry-
    Jentacular.

    Polishing that blade,
    for something you'll hate
    Just put it away,
    retire,
    fade.

    Syzygy.
     
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  2. SinisterKid

    SinisterKid Safety & Support SF Supporter

    Absolutely tremendous effort BB. It just roles off the tongue with precise rhythm. You obviously have a talent for this kind of thing. You certainly took on the challenge and beat the crap out of it. I have a lot to live up to now and I doubt I can better this effort.
     
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  3. bubblebear

    bubblebear Princess

    ahh noo sinister its just for fun! im sure you're going to be amazing :) any kind of writing is good in it's own way. but awh thank you :oops::rolleyes: sometims i get a block but somtimes it comes okay to me. like this one i guess. awhh!! *hugs*
     
  4. bubblebear

    bubblebear Princess

    btw does it still read like rap?
     
  5. SinisterKid

    SinisterKid Safety & Support SF Supporter

    Definitely doesn't read like rap! o_O
     
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