my sons poem to me

Discussion in 'The Coffee House' started by sarahg, Oct 19, 2008.

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  1. sarahg

    sarahg Well-Known Member

    Fright entered the room,
    As dark as night,
    he walked towards my mum again
    and gave her a fright

    He stared her in the eyes
    which made her freeze
    put his hands on her shoulders
    and she fell to her knees

    He was waering that cloak
    of shady grey
    walking the streets
    searching for his prey

    he walked with a limp
    his face full of hate
    she fel lon her back
    and accepted her fate

    and thats his story
    his anger still grows
    the thing that scares her
    is nobody knows..........

    mum thought for a second
    in her coming death and fear
    she thought of what she loved
    and brought it near

    she stood up
    he backed down
    she knows he is still out there
    but now hiding underground

    love won.............

    my son wrote this :biggrin:
    what do u think?
     
  2. Marshmallow

    Marshmallow Staff Alumni

    Its really good hun! tell him i think its brill and send him my love :hug:
     
  3. *dilligaf*

    *dilligaf* Staff Alumni

    its great hun xx
     
  4. snowraven

    snowraven Well-Known Member

    I think he loves his mum.
     
  5. GabrielConroy

    GabrielConroy Well-Known Member

    really good for a youngin
     
  6. Anju

    Anju Well-Known Member

    I agree....great work
     
  7. famous.last.words

    famous.last.words Forum Buddy

    its fantastic.
    You have one wonderful little lad there :)
     
  8. gentlelady

    gentlelady Staff Alumni

    It is good, but very sad. :cry:
     
  9. Snowman

    Snowman Well-Known Member

    Aww.. He's so sweet.
    Tis a good poem. =D
     
  10. Shadowlands

    Shadowlands Official SF Hugger Staff Alumni

    He's smart! :biggrin:
     
  11. LenaLunacy

    LenaLunacy Well-Known Member

    Aww that's a great poem :)
     
  12. Spikey

    Spikey Senior Member

    :eek:hmy: That's really good! Really sensitive and mature for his age, too :smile:.
    You got a future poet on your hands there hun!
     
  13. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Alumni SF Supporter

    its awesome!
     
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