My Version of an F*U* Haiku (*language trig)

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  1. The Fuck You Haiku Series
    (All I got right was 17 syllables in each)

    Intro:

    For the one
    who tossed me into the abyss
    Who did you think you are?


    I
    You’re either dead,
    or Life has really fucked you up
    Or both, and the same

    II
    How could you
    drop someone who was already falling…
    Didn’t you know?

    III
    Let but one thing shatter you,
    and all the rest
    will fall like dominos

    IV
    You did not save me
    But you held my hand while I died
    Then, you let go…

    V
    When did safety
    replace love
    And who left you the gatekeeper of both?

    VI
    At the very end
    you took me right over the edge
    Did you mean to?

    VII
    I’m still here
    What does this say about your power?
    And what about mine…


    FoundAndLost1
    (found again?)
     
  2. ~CazzaAngel~

    ~CazzaAngel~ Staff Alumni

    Good job! :goodjob:
     
  3. theleastofthese

    theleastofthese SF Friend Staff Alumni

    (((Found1)))

    I like it very much.:smile:

    :clap: :hug: :flowers:

    S.
    xoxoxox


    seventeen syllables is pretty succinct in expressing a thought:smile:
     
  4. Thanks you guys :eek:)

    The last 'Fai-ku' (heh-heh) reminds me of Gandalf fighting the Balrog in LOTR - oh, we think he's gone... I thought I was too...

    {{Moi}}
     
  5. BrokenPieces

    BrokenPieces Well-Known Member

    wow those are awesomely good...

    great work...

    BP
     
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