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Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by hollowvoice, Oct 3, 2010.

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  1. hollowvoice

    hollowvoice Senior Member & Antiquities Friend

    I am a person
    but does anyone notice
    i am a person
    who wants someone to care
    icut myself
    i take the pills
    but im still here.
    I go to sleep
    but not to wake
    iwish i wasnt the one i hate
    i dont know what i ever did wrong
    to live my life all on my own
    im not a bad human being
    im just a guy who no ones seeing
    it always seems that good goes bad
    one day im happy the next ten sad
    i want some hope that lifeill be fine
    but lifes not like that especially mine
    ive tried my best
    cant try no more
    should i end it just not sure
    i went to hospital and loved it there when i awoke someone cared
    they asked me why?
    and then i lied
    the truth is this
    id like to die
    i know my family and they may grieve
    perhaps its best if i dont leave
    if i dont wake up will people care
    will they notice im not there
    but this is my life
    i want to die
    im happy now so please dont cry
    i dont want to get old and all alone
    cos ive been young and thats been done......
    andi8172
     
  2. confusedgirl

    confusedgirl Well-Known Member

    Wow..... allot of emotion in that poem, keep writing x
     
  3. total eclipse

    total eclipse SF Friend Staff Alumni

    good to write one feeling down so you can see how some thoughts are just not right. You are seen here and you are not invisible. Get out and join a club an interest you like so you meet others like you with your interest You are not invisible okay we all care your family cares and loves you and they would grieve terribly if you left the pain would be horrific for them Your life has an effect on others that is the way things work you will always matter
     
  4. IV2010

    IV2010 Well-Known Member

    that's very emotional andi...I like it and I grabbed onto this bit..
    i know my family and they may grieve
    perhaps its best if i dont leave

    hold onto that thought because it's going to kill them too if you go.
     
  5. hollowvoice

    hollowvoice Senior Member & Antiquities Friend

    thanks guys, youre words mean the world to me x
     
  6. Twinkle ☆ Twinkle

    Twinkle ☆ Twinkle Well-Known Member

    I thought it was good,and it does capture a lot of feelings.
     
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