Not sure what to write in this title box... poetry I guess.

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by Freya, Mar 20, 2012.

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  1. Freya

    Freya Loves SF Staff Member ADMIN SF Author

    I never write poetry as a rule - I am a prose writer through and through. I am working up to asking for opinions on some writing that actually matters to me. In the meantime - poetry. (And probably a good example of why I dont write it. I get obsesed with rhythm and rhyme at the expense of what I am trying to express.)
    Anyway - gotta start somewhere on the sharing front if I want anyone to ever read what I write so...

    Simple Truth

    A whisper screaming in my mind,
    An endless loop,
    A daily grind.
    It echoes all around my head,
    It won’t let go
    It wants me dead
    I listen and I understand
    My life is void
    My soul is damned.


    I wish there had always been darkness
    Never a phantom light,
    I wish there had never been daytime
    Never a break in the night
    I wish there had never been sunshine
    Never a pause in the rain
    I wish I had never had reason to hope
    Never respite from the pain.
    I wish I hadn’t believed in the dream
    Never listened to the song
    I wish I hadn’t seen tomorrow
    Before the future was gone.
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  2. total eclipse

    total eclipse SF Friend Staff Alumni

    Good write i like the mirage one it speaks to how i feel at times hugs
  3. Witty_Sarcasm

    Witty_Sarcasm Eccentric writer, general weirdo, heedless heathen

    I think your poetry is good! Can't wait to see some more of your writing.
  4. Speedy

    Speedy Staff Alumni

    Thanks for sharing, my friend....hope your upcoming book is going well. :hug:
  5. kmj221

    kmj221 Well-Known Member

    Beautifully written!! Thanks for sharing.
  6. Descendant

    Descendant Account Closed

    Great poem Freya, I think I have the same problem as you when it comes to writing them. I absolutely will not write a poem that doesn't ryhme or flow very well which has led me to scrap a lot of them. Keep writing though, you're very good at it.
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