On the spot (triggering maybe?)

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by The_Guard, Dec 14, 2011.

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  1. The_Guard

    The_Guard Well-Known Member

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    Sitting here at a restaurant and felt "creative" we will see what happens as I try to write a poem on the spot.

    So here I sit trying not to throw a fit
    Remain calm,
    My face hits my palm.
    So tired so depressed
    Why fight when you never get any rest? I ask again and again
    When did it all begin?
    Can't tell where it started but know where it finishes
    On the spot, I end it.
    No more fighting no more trying.
    As I began crying.
    No more sorrow no more pain.
    Nothing left to gain.
    So I ended it. On the spot.


    Well I made this up literally right now, it just came in as long as it took me to type, idk why but that is how all my poetry forms, but this one in particular, I literally typed from my iPhone straight to you never seen before, what did you think?
     
  2. Acy

    Acy Mama Bear - TLC, Common Sense Staff Member Safety & Support

    You have used some great imagery in this. I can see someone sitting there, just having their head and palm of their hand hit, and asking those questions. I feel sad that at the end of the poem, the narrator still ended it on the spot. I hope you are not so hopeless in rl. :hug:

    That's really cool that your poetry more or less reaches out and grabs you to write it down. :)
     
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