Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by Dust2Dust, Dec 22, 2011.

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  1. Dust2Dust

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    Jagged nail scrapes on cold lime stone
    Eclipse hid rape, bandaged heart alone.

    Screams muffled, in iron mask vice.
    Shadows shuffel, bruised flesh feed mice.

    Tourniquet surounds the soul.
    Oubliette I'm forgotten in this hole...
    Rotten walls close, cracked skull
    drips on toes, arrhythmic heart drones dull.

    Life hemrages, red eyes leak,
    love damages. And now the world weeps.

    Retrospects flood, as pain drowns.
    Viscous mud sufacates with heavy pounds.
    Lost in lies its here jawed worms feed.
    Here to die, they gorge upon the need

    Cerebral cuncussion shock!
    Cathedrals chior sings, Gods voice mocks.

    Orisons fall on deaf ears.
    Pray in dead halls. God cares not for mans tears.
    Shaking cold, ragged stone cuts knees.
    Time it folds, never to be set free.

    Damned dreams keep company,
    frost hopes gleam in long eternity

    Skelatal claws cut and tear.
    Death pulls. This hells become too much to bear!
    Despite how bright I have shown
    In my Oubliette, I will die alone.


    ou·bli·ette /ˌo͞oblēˈet/
    Noun: A secret dungeon with access only through a trapdoor in its ceiling.

    This is the last poem I wrote, nearly half a year ago now... maybe longer.

  2. Acy

    Acy Mama Bear - TLC, Common Sense Staff Member Safety & Support

    That is very powerful with a lot of imagery that evokes the darkness and the fear of being trapped in an oubliette, or perhaps just in one's own head. (Btw, oublier in French means to forget, so I suppose an oubliette could also be where people get locked up and the key is thrown away.)

    I hope you share more of your writing, and that you pick up your pen/pencil again soon.
  3. total eclipse

    total eclipse SF Friend Staff Alumni

    yes you words creat such powerful imagery emotion sadness coldness I hope in time you can write something that wille evoke peace and light hun
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