Pain

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by shatteredsoul, Feb 13, 2006.

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  1. shatteredsoul

    shatteredsoul Well-Known Member

    The pain i feel overbears my strength to hold on. hold onto a life i never asked to be born into. I'm alone in this world of true love and perfection. Happiness is no longer something i feel. Love is no longer something i seek. Perfection is something that i can never achieve.
     
  2. BrokenPieces

    BrokenPieces Well-Known Member

    Lots of emotion in this one! I love it!
     
  3. Dead_Alive

    Dead_Alive Guest

    Id retitle it despair... seems you are describing the pain your feeling... which in essence is the hopelessness of despair.
     
  4. shatteredsoul

    shatteredsoul Well-Known Member

    hm..i still like pain..cause im writing a new poem about despair. but thanx for the opinion
     
  5. Dead_Alive

    Dead_Alive Guest

    ok,,, maybe call that one pain?


    :rolleyes:
     
  6. shatteredsoul

    shatteredsoul Well-Known Member

    hmm..noi like this one as pain..i dont know why!! lol im so confused
     
  7. Dead_Alive

    Dead_Alive Guest

    naw I was being sarcastic... sorry... hey you write well... you should keep them all and when you get enough to make a book... publish them.
     
  8. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Alumni SF Supporter

    :hug:
     
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