Passion in the Blow (about abuse, could trigger)

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  1. SmilePretty

    SmilePretty Staff Alumni

    a narrative poem i wrote for english class:


    Like a feather she walks up the stairs,
    Careful not to wake up the person who cares
    That she is sneaking in late tonight
    She doesn’t want to get into a fight.

    She falls into bed dreaming of him,
    The show starts and the lights dim.
    On him she will always depend,
    Teenage love never foresees an end.

    Everyday they were intertwined,
    Never have experiencing love of this kind.
    She thought that love was all she had,
    Until one day she made him mad.

    His fist rose to strike her face,
    Just to put her back into place.
    Her body flew backwards at the strength of the blow,
    The passion in his eyes lost its glow.

    She covered up make-up and smiles
    And told herself to get through these trials.
    He apologized and seemed sincere
    But for it to never happen again she’d better adhere.

    He molded her into a perfect mute,
    Making their relationship seem sweet and cute.
    No one knew what happened behind the closed door,
    How he beat her and called her a whore.

    She felt so sad and betrayed,
    How could love treat her this way?
    She didn’t want to be “that one”
    Who let true love come undone.

    The day before she ended it all,
    She let her façade fade and fall,
    Her family could see her pain
    And gave it to her simple and plain.

    She cried the night her mother cared
    For the first time since her father spared.
    Her pain was too vast and great,
    She couldn’t see her pain was sure to abate.
     
  2. tintin

    tintin Guest

    SmilePretty, that is amazing hun, your so talented. It's really emotional and evokes the readers emotions too. I love it. Well done. I bet you got a good grade didn't you?

    :heart:
     
  3. SmilePretty

    SmilePretty Staff Alumni

    idk i just turned it in today :tongue:
     
  4. tintin

    tintin Guest

    You'll get a high grade I bet... You better tell it me :eek:hmy:
    I need to polish mine off lol.
     
  5. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Alumni SF Supporter

    Amazing poem hun :hug:
     
  6. SmilePretty

    SmilePretty Staff Alumni

    aww thank you hun :hug:
     
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