Pick up the pieces

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by Shauna Lea, Jan 15, 2007.

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  1. Shauna Lea

    Shauna Lea Staff Alumni

    A song i wrote about the moment i found out the love of my life had been lying to me for so long...tell me what u think!

    Did the world just stop spinning
    Did the sky turn to grey
    The deafening silence speaks a thousand times
    Louder than the words we could say
    The floors pulled out from under me
    The walls that surrounded are nowhere to b seen
    Even tho ur right here wit me
    Im more alone that ive ever been

    Is anything between us real
    Can we ever really heal
    Tell me where we go from here
    When i single thought brings a tear
    My heart is shattered on the floor
    And ur the only one...
    To Pick up the pieces

    Suddenly with a few words
    My life is upside down
    Im in a place where ive never been
    Where broken hearts are found
    It seems these tears have made a sea
    An ocean thats drowning me
    And i wonder if ur strong enough
    to save me when these seas are rough


    I find it hard to take a breath
    Ur eyes they shine a little less
    ...then once before
    The dullness allows me to
    Look inside and see right through
    ...to your soul
    To a place that gives me hope
    To a place that still feels like home!
  2. AuronT

    AuronT Well-Known Member

    I think it sounds really good but I'd more say it's like a very nice poem then a song. :) That's how I read it anyway, but as I said, either way, very good. ^^
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