Promise

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by thesemomentsastheypass, Jan 8, 2008.

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  1. thesemomentsastheypass

    thesemomentsastheypass Well-Known Member

    And when the night, by some stroke,
    worked your pajama drawstring
    into an unfathomable knot
    I picked and unraveled in a silent
    calm panic, unrelenting until
    the two ends separated because
    a tiny promise would break with
    every knot I could not undo
    since I said, and meant, some
    words that went:
    my love, I’ll never fail you.
     
  2. theleastofthese

    theleastofthese SF Friend Staff Alumni

    absolutely beautiful! short but oh so sweet. I wish someone would write poetry like this for me...:sad:
     
  3. thesemomentsastheypass

    thesemomentsastheypass Well-Known Member

    thank you.

    If you like

    it's for you.
     
  4. Trip the Dark fantastic

    Trip the Dark fantastic Well-Known Member

    What more praise can I give other than saying; your words don't tell stories, they point towards curvatures in my space-time of memories...those crossing points in space and time which either allow me manifesting my memories as massive bodies or as ethereal dust..ready to create and play god again..

    Beautiful journeys they all are...
     
  5. theleastofthese

    theleastofthese SF Friend Staff Alumni

    thank you:smile: I accept with pleasure:smile:
     
  6. danni

    danni Chat Buddy

    aww that was really good hun :hug:
     
  7. thesemomentsastheypass

    thesemomentsastheypass Well-Known Member

    Thank you all so much.

    I haven't checked in for a few days.

    Responses like these never cease to baffle.


    Thanks again.

    As a point of note, the person this was originally written for didn't respond at all when shown it. It's moments like that that keep me coming back to sites like this :sad:

    Love and hope,

    Moments
     
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  8. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Alumni SF Supporter

    cool:smile:
     
  9. theleastofthese

    theleastofthese SF Friend Staff Alumni

    THe one for whom it was originally written did not respond... how cold...:sad:
     
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