Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by curtius, Jan 30, 2006.

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  1. curtius

    curtius Well-Known Member

    sliceing silence
    personal violence
    private hate
    emotional fate
    cutting through
    what makes you
    God I dont know what to do
    I cant let go
    I cannot show
    the things I need
    the things I bleed
    I'll do the fucking dirty deed
    I'll cut until my pain's relieved
    If only I you could really see...
    the things I need to bleed.

  2. curtius

    curtius Well-Known Member

    hmmm... second to last line....

    "I" should be omitted

    screw typos!
  3. gothic_spleen

    gothic_spleen Antiquities Friend

    dude...that was so deep...yet so me....i needed to see that
  4. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Member Safety & Support SF Supporter

    Great poem :)
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