Shadow in the Mind--Trigger?

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by blacktears, Jul 2, 2009.

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  1. blacktears

    blacktears Member

    Shadow in the Mind

    In the times of weeping darkness,
    When black tears stain your eyes,
    Where light is but a memory,
    And darkness paints your skies,
    In this time of choking shadows,
    Of everlasting night,
    Where you are blinded in the dark,
    Where you have lost all sight,
    Of where the surface really is,
    In this tumbling wave,
    For now you sink into the dark,
    You sink into your grave.
    You’ve struggled for so long now,
    Just to keep on sinking,
    And now you’ve run out of hope,
    You can’t help but thinking.
    ‘Cus your hope has run out,
    And all your strength has fled,
    Because you killed your strength,
    When they saw how you’ve bled.
    So now you’re sinking down,
    ‘Cus all your strength is gone,
    Maybe once your breath is out,
    They’ll smile at the Dawn.
    At first it will destroy them,
    How you’ve sunk into the wave,
    But maybe someday,
    They won’t visit your grave,
    And the tears will stop flowing,
    The strength with come back,
    And happiness will return,
    Nothing more will they lack.
    Except for maybe,
    The memory of you,
    How you used to smile,
    How you used to be true.
    But into the wave you are sinking now,
    To become a shadow in the mind,
    Of all those who remember you,
    Of those you left behind.
     
  2. SmilePretty

    SmilePretty Staff Alumni

    "For now you sink into the dark
    You sink into your grave"
    That is an amazing line

    I like the concept of the poem, and how right before the end it got a bit hopeful....idk if you feel this way lol
     
  3. Remedy

    Remedy Chat & Forum Buddy

    Beautiful poem! :hug:
     
  4. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Alumni SF Supporter

    Beautiful! :heart:
     
  5. blacktears

    blacktears Member

    thanks all
     
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