She's Just a Kid

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  1. thedeafmusician

    thedeafmusician Staff Alumni

    I wrote this when I was eleven, as I think the poem says... although I found it again recently and tweaked it and got rid of a verse that made no sense...

    She’s just a kid, what can she do?
    She can’t do anything, to help you.
    She’s just a kid, eleven years young.
    Youthful, innocent, highly strung.

    Full of life, full of vigour.
    A lot of spirit and energy in her.
    Spirit untamed, spirit unbroken.
    Until they made her a lot less open.

    She has no happiness in living life.
    She has to deal with trouble and strife.
    Not by her but the people around her.
    Endless fights are what she has to incur.

    They think she can’t hear, she knows better.
    She wishes that she could hear them never.
    She wants out, she wants it to end.
    But there is no end around that bend.

    She may be wise, but she is also young.
    She lost her childhood but she’s still a kid.
    Who wants to be loved and wants to be held close.
    And wants the comfort of a great big hug.

    Those reassuring arms embracing her.
    The simple security of someone there.
    Simple things, that are there no more.
    Simple things that have long gone.

    She’s just a kid, what can she do?
    She has the ability to help, but chose not to.
    They are adults who can sort themselves out.
    They need to learn to do without.

    Those dark brown eyes, deep and knowing,
    Those dark brown eyes, wise and perceptive.
    No more do they have that innocence,
    Those dark brown eyes see malevolence.

    She’s just a kid, but is she really?
    Sometimes she thinks that she isn’t.
    But she knows deep down inside,
    She’s an insecure kid that’s unsure of life.

  2. kath

    kath Well-Known Member

    TDM hun i think thats a wonderful poem - so powerful,so expressive and written by an eleven yoear!i think you got real talent!

    YOur poem moved me a lotwhen i read it and i coudl identify with many parts of it [as im sure would many children from this country an d further afield currenltly experiencing similar to what you wen t through or adults who went through it previously] - from my own experiences the bit i could identitycfy wiht most was when you talked about overhearing the arguments and how unhappy this made you - i feel disloyal to my parents saying this but i can identify with that so much.Please know you arent cant say i can totally feel what you feel or waht you felt when you wrote this or anything but i can isay i think i acan realate and am here anytime if you want/need me.Please look after yourself.Thanks for sharing.Please wrtie more one ayday![no pressure though ovbviously!].

    Take care and very very best wishes for ow
  3. thedeafmusician

    thedeafmusician Staff Alumni

    Thankyou Kath... roo-ee actually reminded me that I wrote this.. when he posted his story lol... and so I decided to post it, because I thought that it might be worth it after I fixed it a bit again. Lots of people can relate to this... and I know that sadly enough. And as for writing more... I have a LOT of stuff I've written... I just post the stuff I think is worth posting though.

  4. BrokenPieces

    BrokenPieces Well-Known Member

    wow that was good hun...

    i am remembering how much i like your work...
  5. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Alumni SF Supporter

    :wow: BRILLIANT :clap:
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