Short poem.

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  1. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Alumni SF Supporter

    Tears are trickling down my face,
    emotions running wild all over the place,
    there's no one here to hear my cries,
    soon all hope within me dies,
    some days I wish I could run and hide,
    wishing the pain and torment would subside.
    life is a continuous fight,
    I believe one day ill see the light.
     
  2. Acy

    Acy Mama Bear - TLC, Common Sense Staff Member Safety & Support

    I like it!

    (Lynne, I hope the light you see is the light that helps you find your way in this life. :hug:)
     
  3. Confusticated

    Confusticated Well-Known Member

    This is a great poem... and you can see how it goes from quite sad, to... well an ambigous ending. I hope you mean the light to keep on going, but it's still a really great read. Short and simple too. Well done =]
     
  4. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Alumni SF Supporter

    Thank you hun :hug:
     
  5. pit

    pit Well-Known Member

    I love the flow, emotion, and reconciliation of this poem.:goodjob:
     
  6. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Alumni SF Supporter

    Thank you :D
     
  7. johnson8681

    johnson8681 Well-Known Member

    Awesome! poem Daisy and well written.
     
  8. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Alumni SF Supporter

    Thanks. :shy:
     
  9. fweeps

    fweeps Staff Alumni

    Great poem Lynn good writing style . *hug
     
  10. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Alumni SF Supporter

    Thanks Maria :cheekkiss:
     
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