so i havent written for a while.

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  1. thedeafmusician

    thedeafmusician Staff Alumni

    white /why-t/ n. lack of colour

    poetry /POH-uh-tri/ n. 1: art or work of a poet. 2: poems collectively 3: poetic or tenderly pleasing quality. 4: anything compared to poetry.

    I.
    in the exam world, the papers are breathing.

    pens swish and glide, almost silently. the air is flat, still, deadened but for the quiet padding of feet.

    and i wonder why.

    II.
    institutionalised minds build and shape our world.

    III.
    fast forward: "you're like a robot!"
    wide eyes gaze in awe
    at human mechanical efficiency.

    we sit opposite each other at the table,
    two girls: one young, one younger
    and i cannot help but admire her
    thoughts on the world. she breathes it
    in and cannot take it quickly enough.

    ~

    everything is new to the very young --
    fresh minds are as yet unfettered
    by ordered thinking

    IV.
    the ultimate irony: the real learning starts
    once leaving school
    and yet school is where we go learn
    how to think
    properly

    i question why i want to work at one --

    learning should never be forced:
    a natural mind should instinctively lead
    to living life voraciously.

    II(b).
    i think it's a good thing.
     
  2. A.SoNiC.boY

    A.SoNiC.boY Well-Known Member

    this is cool. i like it! :D
     
  3. Acy

    Acy Mama Bear - TLC, Common Sense Staff Member Safety & Support

    A lot of observation and attention to detail...Some lovely phrases, e.g., "pens swish and glide," "the air is flat, still, deadened but for the quiet padding of feet" and "i cannot help but admire her/thoughts on the world. she breathes it/in and cannot take it quickly enough."

    TDF, nicely done!
     
  4. letty

    letty Banned Member

    Great job ,awesome
     
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