Some of my Crappy Poetry

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by JustFirefly, Aug 14, 2011.

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  1. JustFirefly

    JustFirefly Well-Known Member

    Thought id share some of my crappy poetry in case anyone wanted something to read haha

    This poem is about being sexually abused and raped
    (Yes guys do go through this kinda stuff too)
    and i added the last stanza and made it "Complete" when i started dating a Girl that gave me hope.

    Chained By The Faith Of The Damned

    The Truth Collapses
    Under the Pressure of What my expectations are...
    And what my expectations should be.

    The Walls Are Crumbling
    Within these Rooms i created lies Destruction
    Within these walls Lies the chamber of my heart

    Something A Little Twisted
    As my soul starts to catch fire from her sins
    As my heart Bursts into the flames of death...

    Death Brings Life
    Resurrected By the Motions of your Healing Hand
    Resurrecting Hope that has been Gone For To Long

    Motionless Turns To Motion
    Beating Once more before the open sky...
    Beating as the shadows of death Dissipate

    This one is about cutting and the addiction,
    Its about the fight and how the monster inside of me takes over
    screaming in my head. Screaming to end things...

    Demonology & Heartache

    A painful lullaby drifts me to sleep,
    with nightmares preventing me from going to deep;
    eyes wide open as I scream out in pain,
    as demons plunder my soul for their gain.

    Their reddish green eyes haunting my mind,
    as they rip me apart from front to behind;
    praying for god to release me of this,
    or maybe to receive the black widows kiss.

    I wake up that morning with scars on my side,
    a Scene more eerie then Jekyll and Hyde,
    one with Razorblades and a blood red sky,
    as I realize these demons are I.

    Neither of these poems are great BUT THANK YOU FOR READING THEM and if you would like i would LOVE advice.
  2. mlxjaded

    mlxjaded Well-Known Member

    Both of those are really, really great. I especially love the second one. I can definitely relate and I'm sure many other people here can too.

    Post more if you have them!
  3. IV2010

    IV2010 Well-Known Member

    I really like your poems..well done
  4. JustFirefly

    JustFirefly Well-Known Member

    Thank you :D Maybe i will.. ive been writing poetry since i was 5(Maybe earlier but thats as early as i can remember). Im 21 now lol. I have a few hundred ive saved on this comp that no ones seen.. Thank you
  5. mlxjaded

    mlxjaded Well-Known Member

    A few HUNDRED?! :yay: post more :)
  6. Sais

    Sais Well-Known Member

    I really like it, very strong, intense, congrats! :)
    It's just this one line that seems a too common image and doesn't fit
    in the first poem Within these walls Lies the chamber of my heart

    I'd like to read more too.
  7. DLBach

    DLBach Well-Known Member

    No crap here. I have been writing poetry for more than 30 years. Keep writing what is in your heart and be true to you.
  8. AlopexAngel

    AlopexAngel Chat Buddy

    Very nice Nei. Keep writing.
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