Some stuff I've been writing lately..

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by NoRegrets, Dec 17, 2006.

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  1. NoRegrets

    NoRegrets Well-Known Member

    I know it's horrid. I feel the end closing in around me, and this delays it if only for a minute...

    It's only thunder, she has said
    I've found that to be true
    It seems now, the sky is only clear
    When I'm walking with you
    The clouds must roll beneath the moon
    While I lie awake at night
    Pining for you
    Simply wishing that you could hold me tight
    Take my fears, and take my heart
    I have no more to offer
    I could tell you when we do touch,
    I pray it could be longer
    So tell me to chin up
    Send a glance my way
    And if you wonder, ask the sky
    Why I can't smile today


    And not really a poem...just whatever came through my fingers.

    After a while you can't even tell when she's hurting.
    She can't bear to show happiness.
    How could she? The pain in her eyes would then be obvious.
    Instead of accepted as a part of her.
    You look and you see depression, and you leave it be.
    I look, I see fear and pain.
    Dreaming of what she could be...
    Or rather, what she could have been.
     
  2. twilightki

    twilightki Well-Known Member

    Great stuff! Flows really good. I loved the line with the clouds rolling beneath the moon. I pictured a halloween night. Beautiful. :biggrin:
     
  3. theleastofthese

    theleastofthese SF Friend Staff Alumni

    It's not horrid - I like it! It expresses your feelings quite well and poetically, and isn't that what poems are?:smile:

    least
     
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