Sounds

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by Tavil, Jun 4, 2009.

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  1. Tavil

    Tavil Well-Known Member

    Sailing on the clouds, dreaming of the sounds
    Of laughter in the moonlight
    Lovely voices, many choices, do you hear the sounds?
    Of laughter in the moonlight
    The children singing, the people cheering, life's full of the sounds..
    Of laughter in the moonlight
    The Sleeper's awaken, the new day starts.. the joyous sounds depart,
    Do you hear the sounds.. of crying in the sunlight?
     
  2. NotSureAnymore

    NotSureAnymore Well-Known Member

    Very touching.. it's almost like I can hear these words pounding in my head.
     
  3. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Alumni SF Supporter

    awesome :heart:
     
  4. CCK

    CCK Well-Known Member

    Wow... powerful and well executed. Very good. Only critique I have is that where you used 2 periods there should be 3 to make a proper ellipsis. :p

    You have real talent!
     
  5. Tavil

    Tavil Well-Known Member

    Thank you for the kind replies.
     
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