suicide and cigarettes (temp. name)

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  1. Shadowplay

    Shadowplay Staff Alumni

    Starry skies and cigarettes
    Ashtray kisses and regrets
    Heart shaped clouds, big blue sky
    Lets just pretend that its alright


    Sick with miserable glee
    Self-Hatred is what makes me
    Crack a grin, Curl my lips
    I deserve to Feel like shit
    break me down
    watch me burn
    I'll suffer and astound
    And get what I deserve


    Self-destruct, right way wrong
    Miss the one over who I fawn
    falling down on broken glass
    when can I be free at last?


    save the best for you
    I never promised too
    you really shoulda known
    I'm gonna die alone
     
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  2. Shadowplay

    Shadowplay Staff Alumni

    rewrite:
    "Nicotine"

    Starry skies and cigarettes
    Ashtray kisses and regrets
    Heart shaped clouds, big blue sky
    Lets just pretend that its alright


    Sick with miserable glee
    Self-Hatred is what makes me
    Crack a grin, Curl my lips
    I deserve to Feel like shit
    break me down
    watch me burn
    In the end
    I'll get what I deserve


    Nickle bags and grayed pipette
    Cotten balls and Cigarettes
    Falling down and broken glass
    When will I feel free at last?



    save the best for you
    I never promised too
    you really shoulda known
    I'm gonna die alone
     
  3. Hey -

    I like both versions - prefer (if I must) the first one as well as the temp. title - mainly cause I'm pretty much a chain smoker. Lately seems like the slow version of a death-wish (then again, no one get out of this life alive...and being in an extremely weird mood lately, remembering with 'warped' glee a line from a comedian who said, "I just can't wait for all those healthy people to die - I mean, isn't that going to REALLY piss them off!")

    FAL1
     
    Last edited: Aug 16, 2006
  4. resistance

    resistance Staff Alumni

    It has a lot of feeling, I like it.
     
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