Super Green ( You wish )

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by bubblebear, Jul 12, 2016.

  1. bubblebear

    bubblebear Princess

    Super Green wants to be super seen,
    but how to be seen
    if you've never even been.

    I push and I shove,
    and I listen and I love.
    But I really can't really
    force him up above.

    up my station,
    as I try to support.
    But how can I help
    a person so unwilling to move.
    To push and
    to shove
    To pull
    and to coax
    Is like trying to charm -
    a five year old.

    It is all really in vain
    he, himself
    is stuck on that godforsaken train.
    To push and to shove,
    to coax and say -
    '' look, look up, above!''
    You're wasting your time,
    it's up to him
    to find.

    Until then he'll just sit
    That intimate silence
    His only true friend
    to accompany him to the end.​

    Disclaimer: not in a poetic mood so bear with me xD
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  2. SinisterKid

    SinisterKid Safety & Support SF Supporter

    If you want it to [and I did] it reads very much like a rap. Thats not to say you meant it to sound or read that way, its my interpretation.

    Poetry doesn't always have to or need to rhyme for it to be good poetry/prose.
  3. bubblebear

    bubblebear Princess

    lol i thought it rhymed :eek: ill try reading it in rap. never thought of that x
  4. SinisterKid

    SinisterKid Safety & Support SF Supporter

    It does rhyme, I was just saying that poetry/prose doesn't always have to rhyme :rolleyes:
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  5. Huw

    Huw Well-Known Member

    I had no option five lines in and I could feeeel the rap ta-king eff-ect.
  6. bubblebear

    bubblebear Princess

    lol cool. maybe i should be a rapper #wasteofcollege :D
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