"That sound again"

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by passengers_side_, Oct 17, 2012.

Thread Status:
Not open for further replies.
  1. passengers_side_

    passengers_side_ New Member

    The mildew
    morning opens,
    it's presence known
    Still blue

    Wind cuts memories,
    cascade's your shadow
    A name on the fog
    the past below us

    Apparitions;
    Rose hued through the glass
    Melancholy waves
    the stage moves
     
  2. total eclipse

    total eclipse SF Friend Staff Alumni

    Beautiful poem hun
     
  3. Acy

    Acy Mama Bear - TLC, Common Sense Staff Member Safety & Support

    Your poem evokes a sense of stillness and then a sense of the "unsettling" of that stillness by wind, cascades, memories, apparitions, and melancholy. Very nice!
     
  4. Sadeyes

    Sadeyes Staff Alumni

    This is perfect
     
Thread Status:
Not open for further replies.