The Day You Were Born

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by Witty_Sarcasm, Mar 14, 2016.

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  1. Witty_Sarcasm

    Witty_Sarcasm Writer, Musician, Fun Lover, Magic Maker

    I wrote this 2 years ago, but I still feel the same way. Sadly I think that I always will.

    One more trip around the sun
    One more trip to come undone
    This is your life, and for it, you have nothing to show
    All this life and you had no room to grow
    Why wait to see another sunset?
    You have nothing to show for this yet
    Best to quit while you're ahead
    Hopefully soon you will end up dead
     
  2. Williamstuckinarut

    Williamstuckinarut Well-Known Member

    I like how a whole revolution around Sol is a metaphor for not progressing in your life. It's only a metaphor though isn't it?
    Take care,
    Willie
     
  3. Witty_Sarcasm

    Witty_Sarcasm Writer, Musician, Fun Lover, Magic Maker

    No, that's pretty much how my life is. I wish I knew how to start over but don't know if I can at this point.
     
  4. Flying Fox

    Flying Fox Well-Known Member

    Very eloquent poem :).

    There may be hope; we all have our ups and downs, and there may an up over the horizon that we just can't see yet. *huggles*
     
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  5. Williamstuckinarut

    Williamstuckinarut Well-Known Member

    It's a matter of relativity, both celestial and personal. I know you can progress, small steps at a time.

    Take care. Don't lose hope in yourself :)
     
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  6. Witty_Sarcasm

    Witty_Sarcasm Writer, Musician, Fun Lover, Magic Maker

    It's hard to see that right now. Ten minutes into the day, and I'm already on the verge of crying. I don't want it to always be like this.
     
  7. ThePhantomLady

    ThePhantomLady Safety and Support SF Supporter

    *hugs* hun!

    Beautiful poem though!
     
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  8. Witty_Sarcasm

    Witty_Sarcasm Writer, Musician, Fun Lover, Magic Maker

    Thank you :)
     
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