the nightmare (working title)

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by thedeafmusician, Oct 18, 2006.

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  1. thedeafmusician

    thedeafmusician Staff Alumni

    Not my best, but its for school, so it can't be *that* good anyway. And yes I did steal a verse from an old old old poem... it was the only part of it I *really* liked so I re used it. And it also isnt finished lol.



    Darkness swelling
    Light is leaving and
    Fast receding
    So stop proceeding
    To go ahead
    To keep on fighting
    But don’t end it all
    As fast as lightning

    Forever fighting
    No end in sight but
    I keep trying
    In the hope that
    It will end ‘cause
    It still haunts here
    Never-ending
    Always in fear

    Slowly submitting
    Its coming now and
    I try run but
    It comes faster
    Catching up
    I can’t run forever
    I’m too tired and
    I give up as
    I wake up screaming
     
  2. Allo..

    Allo.. Well-Known Member

    I like it =)
     
  3. theleastofthese

    theleastofthese SF Friend Staff Alumni

    I like it also!:smile: :smile:

    least
     
  4. ~CazzaAngel~

    ~CazzaAngel~ Staff Alumni

    I really like it! :biggrin: :smile: :hug:






    ~Carolyn
     
  5. "Darkness swelling" alone is so telling - evocative. It's a great poem (though your teacher must *wonder* about you - we're sure - your brilliant)


    FAL1
     
  6. ~CazzaAngel~

    ~CazzaAngel~ Staff Alumni

    So so so true! you rock hun! :wootrock:



    We love ya hun! :hug:




    ~Carolyn
     
  7. thedeafmusician

    thedeafmusician Staff Alumni

    Thanks you guys... I'm still working on it tho, so if I remember I'll keep posting rewrites - its for a comp.

    TDM
     
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