There's Still Hope

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by xoCherie, Jul 19, 2012.

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  1. xoCherie

    xoCherie Well-Known Member

    The world comes crashing down
    And suddenly you're falling a thousand feet below
    Tumbling and turning in the air
    As your hands reach out for something to hold onto
    Scrambling at anything and everything
    That could support you at this difficult time

    Just as you're close to giving up
    A hand reaches out
    And you grasp it tight
    Not wanting to let go and be falling
    Through the air of nothingness
    That is your world now

    But your grip is weak and your palm sweaty
    You feel yourself begin to slip once more
    And reach out with your free hand onto
    Something, anything that will hold you
    Only to realise that what you're holding
    Grasping ever so tightly
    Is a soft thrumming heartbeat

    You stare in wonder and amazement
    As this beautiful thing beats within your palm
    Reminding you that there is hope
    For those that keep fighting for what
    They deserve; there is hope
    For those that hold strong when the
    World comes tumbling down

    For there is always hope
    Even when everything seems so hopeless
     
  2. SilentScream

    SilentScream Well-Known Member

    Hello. :)

    I really like the text, I like what it says.
    It is quite emotional, but yet so beautiful.
    I am a poet myself, and to be honest I like it when the rhyme rythm is:
    'A
    A
    B
    B
    C
    C
    D
    D

    A
    A
    B
    B..'

    But ofcourse everyone has got their own way of writing and ofcourse experessing, and that is the most important I think;
    to be able to express yourself.
    I really like your poem, so.. I hope to read more from you sometime! ^^

    Greetings,
    SilentScream.(Maruko.)
     
  3. TheLoneWolf

    TheLoneWolf Well-Known Member

    Very nicely done, Cherie :)

    Maruko, poems don't have to rhyme. They may flow better when they do, but I find rhyming schemes to be highly restrictive. You should never compromise your message and purpose for the sake of literary aesthetics. Form is meaningless without function.
     
  4. SilentScream

    SilentScream Well-Known Member

    I did not say that they have to rhyme, but I prefer them to rhyme.
     
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