thirst

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  1. jane doe

    jane doe Well-Known Member

    The dark side of my soul whispers me on my ear again.
    My heart races nonstop
    But My eyes wont even reflect the inner pain
    The whispers inside feel so loud
    There isn’t any other voice to hear
    There isn’t any other voice I want to hear
    Blood is running through my veins
    So quicly
    So tempting.
    The taste of the hidden pleasure
    So hard to be understood by humans.
    So easy to enjoy, and hard to measure
    I feel sorrow inside
    I feel anger burning me
    I feel hatred involved.
    There is a grievous thirst
    That I cant control anymore.
    Making me realize of the truth
    Its not the blood what I feel through my veins
    Its not sorrow, nor anger
    Even hatred is absent of my soul.
    Is The thirst consuming it.
    Taking control over my actions,
    Taking control over the voice
    And screaming at me silently
    Forcing me to become what I became
    A soulless shadow, shattered in peaces
    Completely used to it, and thirsty for it
    Happiness through hearing the voice
    Pleasure by following the instincts
    Pain to complete me again.
     
  2. justafool

    justafool Well-Known Member

    Your fine bloody poem certainly quenched my own thirst, at least for a little while.

    :flowers: :flowers: :flowers:
     
  3. jane doe

    jane doe Well-Known Member

    :) i wrote it trying to fight the urge im glad u quenched it for a while at least <3
     
  4. justafool

    justafool Well-Known Member

    Well, I really, really liked it. You are my Queen of dark eloquence.

    I bow down.

    :serenade: :wub: :clap:
     
  5. jane doe

    jane doe Well-Known Member

    lol have u read the otherones ive made?
     
  6. justafool

    justafool Well-Known Member

    No, Jane, this is my first experience with you. (I was a virgin.)

    If you can make more of your work available to me in some way, I shall giddily plunge in.
     
  7. jane doe

    jane doe Well-Known Member

    this is called unconditional friend:

    Waiting for the end
    i came looking for hope
    looking for someone
    who can understand my feelings
    and i found you
    so lost like me
    you listened to me
    and you gave me what i needed.
    i haven´t met you yet
    and you almost don´t know nothing about me
    but you were there
    and no matter what
    i´ll be there for you too
    now i feel i know you
    and that we are friends
    and friends shouldn´t be alone
    i´ll hang on, if you hang on
    and if you´r sad, i´ll cry with you
    i´ll be there as longer as you stay with me
    because you are too much for me right now
    i won´t let you go
    stay beside me and let´s make this friendship works
    i know you´ve been hurted
    i won´t do that to you
    and if your desition is to go away
    i´ll fade away with you.

    and thisone is called untill i finaly die

    I´ve been dreaming about you
    I´ve been waiting about you
    I´ve been trying to find you
    But doesn´t matter what i do,
    you are only on my mind
    Everytime I´ve tryed to get closer to you
    i´ve got hurt
    and i´m not the onlyone
    Everyone who tries, and fails,
    gets hurted
    and i´ve been trying to be with you
    so many times, that i´m tired.
    tired of getting hurt
    tired of living my life like this
    i just want everything ends
    my dreams
    my waiting
    my search
    i just want to be with you and finally....die


    thisone dont have a title yet:

    natural as breathing
    simple like the snow
    You´ve taking everything
    that once, belong to me
    You are always present in my thoughts
    and I, a fool who doesn´t understand anything
    i dedicated my entire life to you
    and that´s the way i knew you will answer my call
    taking away everithing from me
    taking away everyonewho ever loved me
    taking away...who i used to be
    and you let only a shadow
    of the happy woman i was once
    and this shadow
    walks lonely, drawning itself on tears
    this shadow is, may be, the memory of me
    but i just know
    this shadow wants the moon comes out
    so it can rest in peace at last
     
  8. justafool

    justafool Well-Known Member

    Thank you for including more of your poetry. For me, it's impossible to separate for the person who is the poet from the words that he or she puts together. I respond to the personality and the sensibility that you project and so the words that come from you have more meaning for me than if they had come from someone else. Your soul can be found in your words and your soul is as beautiful as are the words.

    I appreciate you.

    :clap: :clap: :thumbup: :thumbup: :arms: :arms:
     
  9. jane doe

    jane doe Well-Known Member

    aww thats so sweet! im glad u liked it!

    u are such a nice person! :hug:
     
  10. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Alumni SF Supporter

    wow,intense! I liked it :)
     
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