"To Dread Truth" - My First

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  1. Convergence

    Convergence Guest

    I am a writer, though I haven't ever tried poetry. I guess my problems have left me inable to write long novels and stories. I will try using my vocabulary and expressions to write.

    It's my first, andit's not much. But I would appreciate your comments, positive or negative.

    "To Dread Truth"

    When that time comes,
    We have to part,
    You walk away,
    Not knowing the love I feel,
    And the constant pain,
    Of never telling,
    How important you are.

    I look into your eyes,
    Their radiance,
    Echoes a thousand words.
    Even then,
    I wish I could say,
    Those three words,
    But I don’t want you to change.

    Your compassion,
    Your touch,
    Your voice,
    So soothing and caring.
    While mine stays hollow,
    So cold,
    And destroys your beauty .

    You have to leave again,
    And you whisper,
    “I’ll see you later”
    Like a blade cutting,
    I’m in anguish,
    Yet…

    I can still frailly smile…



    Thanks for reading, I appreciate it.
     
  2. Isa

    Isa Well-Known Member

    Its hauntingly beautiful. I find the untraditional poems that compare love to pain are the ones that are the most hard hitting, because love is like pain its encompassing and uncontrollable and constant.

    This poem shows love and self doubt and loneliness.. its gorgeous.
     
  3. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Member Safety & Support SF Supporter

    beautiful poem,thank you for sharing :D
     
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