Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by InnerStrength, Jan 11, 2007.

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  1. InnerStrength

    InnerStrength Well-Known Member


    Have you come to know what torment is?
    Striking at you with a nocturnal bitterness
    No, it’s not love, but nothing less
    Or hate, that stale temptress

    A simple combination of raw emotion
    When love causes hate
    When hate causes love
    Which are you a product of?

    A mother’s spirit is present in her child
    Stoked with the seed of a father gone wild
    With passion
    With lust
    With greed and distrust

    What torment leaves in it’s wake
    Is a realization of a past mistake

    Memories of emotional slavery
    Forever forgiven
    With depravity

    Perhaps it wasn’t love after all
    So be it
  2. There is great power in what you write and how you express yourself friend

  3. InnerStrength

    InnerStrength Well-Known Member

    That's a compliment coming from you FAL1. Although this "power" of mine seems a little directionless, sometimes. I wonder if this expression of self will have any real benefit, for me, or anyone else for that matter. These scrawlings from within just seem so...wasteful.
  4. There's no general rule in how and in what direction sparks should fly. Keep shooting them out. Its cathartic if nothing else - and you DESERVE the release. The human condition demands it. Your words are powerful, and never wasted in and of themselves. They touch others in ways you can't imagine...

  5. Allo..

    Allo.. Well-Known Member

    That was.. beautiful.

    And so empowering..

    I loved it.
  6. theleastofthese

    theleastofthese SF Friend Staff Alumni

    There are no rules in poetry, only that you express yourself honestly and that it helps - you and others - to see your feelings in a different light. It is such a release to write one's feelings, and it helps others to see feelings that they often share, expressed so well. Keep writing, I like your works and am grateful that you share it with us.:smile:

  7. BrokenPieces

    BrokenPieces Well-Known Member


    its good... i am speechless...

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