*Trig* Jigsaw

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by TinkerLoop, Aug 29, 2010.

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  1. TinkerLoop

    TinkerLoop Well-Known Member

    Take one
    one more
    then a third
    that makes four

    so on...
    I've lost count
    How many?
    What amount?

    I dont know
    Why do you care?
    I dont belong
    neither here or there

    in a box
    cold & dark
    i belong
    i'll leave no mark

    I wont be sorry
    I be complete
    Death is my missing piece
  2. paul777

    paul777 Well-Known Member

    Are you sure you will 'leave no mark?

    I'm sure people will miss you. Friends and family.

    Nice poem though.

    I care because I feel the same.
  3. lost_soul

    lost_soul Staff Alumni

  4. 000000

    000000 Well-Known Member

    Short, sweet, and to the point. Just how poems should be.

    In the fourth set you say you'll "leave no mark" but those words have left a mark with me.
  5. Twinkle ☆ Twinkle

    Twinkle ☆ Twinkle Well-Known Member

    I mostly agree.

    However I simply assume that what they mean by "leave no mark" isn't nessarally litteral but just how they feel. However I agree that people would probablly be sad and miss 'em.
  6. ~CazzaAngel~

    ~CazzaAngel~ Staff Alumni

    I liked the poem, Deb. It's a good piece, and very expressive. Well done. :hug:
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