Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by forlorn, Jan 28, 2008.

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  1. forlorn

    forlorn Staff Alumni

    clean slate, mental state
    harmony at one
    baggage, sleep dep, mental state torture,
    dissected, dissolving
    meds fed make you dead
    wanna be alive but live
    at one with the world
    I used to love
    the life Ive lost
    defibbulate, kick start my heart
    before its too late
    on the brink
    dont wanna fade
    dont wanna sink
    words stuck in throat
    I need to let out
    before Im crushed
    stuffed had enough
    and I trigger
  2. That's a really strong expression. I can feel it. I like the lack of punctuation - it doesn't make it confusing, but more stream-of-consciousness, like the way your emotions are literally flying around inside. You captured that very well (even though it's sad...)
  3. Petal

    Petal SF dreamer Staff Member Safety & Support SF Supporter

    keep writing hun :hug: it will help you
  4. ~CazzaAngel~

    ~CazzaAngel~ Staff Alumni

    Very well done hun. Well expressed. Thank you for sharing, keep writing, let it all out. :hug:
  5. ACRon

    ACRon Well-Known Member

    best poem ive read here for a long long time:smile:
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