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Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by normaljoe, Feb 18, 2015.

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  1. normaljoe

    normaljoe Well-Known Member

    So i use to write poetry a while back and yea it just kind of turned into suicide notes after a while. This is not the latter, and it has some pretty plain metaphors in it but i like it and am kind of proud my current depression/anxiety manifested this instead of a suicide note. I am not as relieved but in a sense lighter.

    I cant help but feel empty,
    Feel that i am ultimately a failure,
    My every act its preceding breathe and its first birth in my mind
    Are immediately plagued by failure.
    A self aware idea seeking to come to fruition
    Trapped in the bowels of depression and anxiety.
    Screaming in my mind to be freed.
    Screaming to a very sympathetic captor.

  2. total eclipse

    total eclipse SF Friend Staff Alumni

    very very well written normaljoe
  3. deb22

    deb22 Well-Known Member

    "Screaming to a very sympathetic captor." So true!

    Your poem is great, but I must tell you I sat for a few minutes watching the giraffe get petted [ I don't know why but it is bloody adorable]
  4. W Miller

    W Miller Well-Known Member

    very well written normaljoe; so honest and eloquent.
  5. normaljoe

    normaljoe Well-Known Member

    right?! that is the only emoticon I actually made an effort to memorize the command line for. lol
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