unheard cry...

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by foreverYoung180, Mar 24, 2010.

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  1. foreverYoung180

    foreverYoung180 Well-Known Member

    Some days i feel im in a darkened room
    no light may shine through
    some days i forget what it's like
    to feel the warmth of the sun on my face
    but i know the dark
    and i will never forget that feeling

    i cry in that darkened room
    but no one hears my voice
    so i cry harder
    but my cries go fallen, unanswered, unheard.

    i wrote that when i was 13...five years ago. i still feel that same way.. btw i know im a horrible writer, so anyone that reads this..im so sorry.
     
  2. Acy

    Acy Mama Bear - TLC, Common Sense Staff Member Safety & Support

    This poem really draws out "sadness." The simplicity of it makes it seem to be a quiet poem, but that actually emphasizes the how strong the sad feelings are. Well done!
     
  3. total eclipse

    total eclipse SF Friend Staff Alumni

    To write the emotions so clearly at 13 the pain i am sorry you are still suffering and hope reaching out here you know your cries do not go unheard.
     
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