Untitled (could do with some help finding a name)

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by Fleurise, May 2, 2014.

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  1. Fleurise

    Fleurise Well-Known Member

    There's this crazy little chappie - with a REALLY stupid grin
    and he's banging on my head - and he's saying "LET ME IN"
    I ask him why would he want to come and visit me -
    and he just smiles

    He invites himself in anyway - looks around my head and says
    "YOU'RE A MESS!!!"
    I get angry and defensive
    I say "I'M LONELY -- I CAN'T COPE -- I'M DEPRESSED!!!!"

    "Cheer up old chum" he says It can't be all that bad. Sit down and have a think of all the good times that you've had
    Think of the smiles you have brought
    The support that you have given
    It's okay to ask for help - not to keep your feelings hidden.

    Think of all the joy that others feel for you
    and the support that will be offered
    for you to see this through.

    Each time you look in a mirror - say
    Keep telling yourself this
    and one day it will hit you WHAM

    The good person that you are
    The kindness that you give
    Open up the door my friend
    And be prepared to live.
  2. Acy

    Acy Mama Bear - TLC, Common Sense Staff Member Safety & Support

    Evanesce, great job with the rhythm and the rhymes and "near-rhymes" (so hard to do sometimes!)! I love the idea of a positive little chappie trying to push some good thoughts into one's mind!

    For a title, how about "The Visitor"? Or "Wisdom from an Unexpected Guest"? :noidea:
  3. total eclipse

    total eclipse SF Friend Staff Alumni

    Love your poem hun i also like Acy title The Visitor hugs to you
  4. Fleurise

    Fleurise Well-Known Member

    "The Visitor" sounds like a great title thanks
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