Untitled (just my current thoughts)

Discussion in 'Poet's Corner' started by Deleted SKU, Jan 30, 2013.

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  1. Deleted SKU

    Deleted SKU Well-Known Member

    To sit back and watch your life's dissection,
    An autopsy in this limbo state,
    Somewhere between life and death
    For more than half, is it too late?
    How many lies with which i’m bound
    Whether born of fear or need
    Too many second chances squandered
    Is that enough to let me secede?
    Cowering in gloomy corners
    Sitting still, but always seeing
    All the things I’ll never have
    My misplaced hope, so now i’m fleeing
    Half a life of tainted innocence,
    The other half of self-destruction
    So where should I go now from here,
    To escape my broken soul’s corruption
    No apology fixes the hurt I’ve caused
    Nor treatment heals the wounds I wear
    A simulacrum of a living being
    Too dark to live, too hurt to care.
     
  2. total eclipse

    total eclipse SF Friend Staff Alumni

    Hugs to you hun you say so well what many feel in the corner of depression Hope you know you can always reach out here hun
     
  3. Acy

    Acy Mama Bear - TLC, Common Sense Staff Member Safety & Support

    Rathis, I liked this a lot. Thank you for sharing it. So well written! In addition to expressing your feelings, your imagery and analogies are great - "life's dissection/...autopsy in this limbo state" and you've achieved a strong rhythm with the lines.
     
  4. Deleted SKU

    Deleted SKU Well-Known Member

    Thank you both. I just need to know I can still write... I know I'm really rusty still, it definately shows.
     
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